diff --git a/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/cat_tree.clj b/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/cat_tree.clj index dcba2641..855daa40 100644 --- a/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/cat_tree.clj +++ b/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/cat_tree.clj @@ -61,11 +61,11 @@ {:run #(do (actions/respond entities % :grandma "It's my Smuffle Wuffles!" :grandma "We were on a pleasant walk through the woods." - :grandma "Then we got in argument, and so he ran up into that tree!") + :grandma "Then we got in an argument, and so he ran up into that tree!") (actions/play-animation entities :grandma :cry) (actions/do-dialogue entities :ego "An argument? With a cat?" - :grandma "Yes of course! We were arguing about politics!")) + :grandma "Yes, of course! We were arguing about politics!")) :choices ["So you want me to get your cat down?" {:run #(actions/respond entities % :grandma "Yes! I need a courageous hero to rescue Smuffle Wuffles for me." @@ -104,7 +104,7 @@ :grandma "Young man, I was here when that sword was put in the stone 100 years ago!" :grandma "Of course I know how it can be pulled!" :grandma "One must prove themselves worthy in wisdom, courage, and might." - :grandma "How about proving your courage by helping rescue Smuffle Wuffles?") + :grandma "How about proving your courage by helping me rescue Smuffle Wuffles?") :choices actions/previous-choices} "Later." {:run #(do (actions/respond entities % @@ -154,9 +154,10 @@ {:run #(do (actions/respond entities % :owl "Yes, in fact there is." :owl "You see, we owls have very strong vision." - :owl "I was born with a birth defect, and only one of my eyes is good." - :owl "I dropped my monocle somewhere around here!" - :owl "Without it, I have severe nausea.") + :owl "I was born with a birth defect, and only one of my eyes is sharp enough for hunting." + :owl "As for the other, alas, I need a monocle, or it's useless." + :owl "And now I've dropped that very monocle somewhere in this valley!" + :owl "What's worse, without it, I have severe nausea.") (do-puke entities) (actions/do-dialogue entities :owl "Excuse me." @@ -200,7 +201,8 @@ :owl "Have you ever thought that maybe you're not that enjoyable to talk to?" :ego "I guess not." :owl "Naw, I'm just pulling your leg." - :owl "I'm an owl, and owls are wise.") + :owl "I'm an owl, and owls are wise." + :owl "Therefore we express our wisdom by way of speech.") (present-owl-choices entities))) (actions/update-state entities #(assoc % :talked-to-owl? true))) diff --git a/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/common.clj b/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/common.clj index 54d58192..27429fa9 100644 --- a/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/common.clj +++ b/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/common.clj @@ -228,14 +228,14 @@ } {:run #(do (talk %) (respond "Bubba's standing right next to me!") - (respond "You're an imposter!") + (respond "You're an impostor!") (respond "Leave us alone."))}) "It's me, Frankie!" {:run #(do (talk %) (respond "Frankie?") (respond "But, I'm Frankie!") - (respond "Imposter!") + (respond "Impostor!") (respond "Leave us alone!"))}]})) ) @@ -252,7 +252,7 @@ (actions/georgia-say entities "I'm counting on you, Tick!") (actions/do-dialogue entities :frankie "Georgia's going steady with me now, Dipstick." - :frankie "No day-dreaming about my girlfriend!") + :frankie "No daydreaming about my girlfriend!") (actions/play-animation entities :frankie :laugh) (actions/do-dialogue entities :frankie "You'd be better off if you just packed your bags and left town." :frankie "Ain't that right, boys?") diff --git a/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/dream.clj b/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/dream.clj index 6028597d..1f7f9da2 100644 --- a/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/dream.clj +++ b/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/dream.clj @@ -350,13 +350,13 @@ :fairy-godfather "Just think about it." :fairy-godfather "You'll have your own little shack at the cemetery..." :fairy-godfather "... where you can stay and not see another person for months on end ..." - :fairy-godfather "well, another alive person anyways.")) + :fairy-godfather "... well, another alive person anyways.")) (defn describe-broom [entities] (actions/do-dialogue entities :fairy-godfather "Janitoring is just the thing for you, Tick." :fairy-godfather "Just think about it." :fairy-godfather "Imagine the sweet smell of victory once you've mopped up some spilled milk." - :fairy-godfather "Or the smell of soap in the bathroom, where you'll spend a lot of your time.")) + :fairy-godfather "Or the smell of soap in the bathroom, where you'll spend your time making the tile and porcelain shine.")) (defn make [screen] (let [fairy-godfather-anim (utils/make-anim "dream/fairy-godfather.png" [63 77] 0.15 [0 1 2 3 2 1 0 1 4 3 2 1]) diff --git a/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/inside_cafeteria.clj b/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/inside_cafeteria.clj index 60d62326..ccb06fff 100644 --- a/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/inside_cafeteria.clj +++ b/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/inside_cafeteria.clj @@ -39,12 +39,12 @@ {:run #(actions/respond entities % :warriors "Verily I say unto you: no." :warriors "We art filled with hunger." - :warriors "And we musteth replentish our strength." + :warriors "And we musteth replenish our strength." :warriors "Get ye your own food!") :choices actions/previous-choices} "Shouldn't you be guarding something?" {:run #(actions/respond entities % - :warriors "Even the mightiest of knights musteth replentish their strength." + :warriors "Even the mightiest of knights musteth replenish their strength." :warriors "And geteth some R and R.") :choices actions/previous-choices} "Why dost thou speaketh in this manner?" diff --git a/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/inside_castle.clj b/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/inside_castle.clj index 9abb55e1..e6f08798 100644 --- a/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/inside_castle.clj +++ b/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/inside_castle.clj @@ -152,7 +152,7 @@ {:run #(actions/respond entities % :game-player "The study of knights?" :game-player "That area of research hasn't been founded yet." - :ego "Well I can be your first subject!" + :ego "Well, I can be your first subject!" :game-player "I'm far too busy." :game-player "Plus, you're not even a knight!") :choices actions/previous-choices} diff --git a/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/inside_house.clj b/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/inside_house.clj index d93a91f8..230db8cb 100644 --- a/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/inside_house.clj +++ b/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/inside_house.clj @@ -67,7 +67,7 @@ (when (not (actions/has-obtained-all-of? entities [:trophy :medal :kiss])) "About that prophecy...") {:run #(actions/respond entities % - :wizard "To become a knight you will need to be worthy in courage, wisdom, and might." + :wizard "To become a knight, you will need to be worthy in courage, wisdom, and might." :wizard "Only then can you become worthy to pull the Sword of Blergh.") :choices [(when (not (actions/has-obtained? entities :trophy)) "How can I prove that I'm worthy in wisdom?") diff --git a/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/outside_castle.clj b/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/outside_castle.clj index c2490b3b..3ffc1a5c 100644 --- a/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/outside_castle.clj +++ b/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/outside_castle.clj @@ -39,7 +39,7 @@ (if (get-in @entities [:state :wants-toy]) (actions/do-dialogue entities :peddler "I will give them to you if you bring me the choicest of toys.") (actions/do-dialogue entities - :peddler "That'll just be 10 sheckels." + :peddler "That'll just be 10 sheckles." :ego "But I haven't got any money!" :peddler "Well, I'm afraid you won't have the choicest of earplugs." :ego "Can't I give you something else for them?" @@ -61,7 +61,7 @@ (if (get-in @entities [:state :wants-toy]) (actions/do-dialogue entities :peddler "I will give it to you if you bring me the choicest of toys.") (actions/do-dialogue entities - :peddler "That'll just be 95 sheckels." + :peddler "That'll just be 95 sheckles." :ego "But I haven't got any money!" :peddler "Well, I'm afraid you won't have the choicest of glass eyes." :ego "Can't I give you something else for them?" @@ -203,7 +203,7 @@ :frankie "But, I could fetch some real good dough for them." :frankie "What would you say, boys?") (actions/play-animation entities :frankie :glance) - (actions/do-dialogue entities :frankie "10 sheckels?")) + (actions/do-dialogue entities :frankie "10 sheckles?")) (actions/has-item? entities :motivational-tapes) (do (actions/remove-item entities :motivational-tapes) (actions/do-dialogue entities @@ -265,7 +265,7 @@ (actions/do-dialogue entities :frankie "The Slinger's Shot?" :ego "No, not the Slinger's Shot!" - :frankie "Look like we hit the jackpot tonight boys!") + :frankie "Looks like we hit the jackpot tonight, boys!") (frankie-comment-on-item entities) (actions/update-state entities #(assoc % :bubba-gone? true)) (actions/do-dialogue entities @@ -433,7 +433,7 @@ :carrot (actions/get-script entities (actions/walk-to entities :ego [168 150] :face :right) (actions/do-dialogue entities - :ego "I don't thing Angus is interested." + :ego "I don't think Angus is interested." :ego "Farmer Doug only feeds him a wild high-protein grass.")) :sack-lunch (actions/get-script entities diff --git a/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/outside_house.clj b/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/outside_house.clj index 914ae737..0bf96dbd 100644 --- a/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/outside_house.clj +++ b/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/outside_house.clj @@ -467,7 +467,7 @@ :ego "No, not yet." :wizard "Hurry, boy! Time's-a-wastin'!") (do - (actions/do-dialogue entities :ego "Gandarf! Boy am I glad to see you." + (actions/do-dialogue entities :ego "Gandarf! Boy, am I glad to see you." :wizard "I'm busy. What is it, Tick?") (actions/present-choices entities {:choices ["I got put in jail!" @@ -494,7 +494,7 @@ :wizard "If you did, you'd be burned to a crisp from his lightning gem!" :ego "Yes, that Bloodclot!" :wizard "I knew that there would be a \"final test\" for the hero who pulled the blade..." - :wizard "But I never imagined this." + :wizard "But I had never imagined this." :wizard "There's only one way to neutralize his lightning magic:" :wizard "The Slinger's Shot." :wizard "It's a magical slingshot that has long lost its power." @@ -751,10 +751,10 @@ (actions/play-animation entities :ego :milk) (actions/remove-item entities :flask-1) (actions/give entities :flask-1-with-milk) - (actions/talk entities :ego "Sheeps milk.") + (actions/talk entities :ego "Sheep's milk.") ) (actions/talk entities :ego "She's too far away.")) - (actions/do-dialogue entities :ego "I like a nice glass of milk." + (actions/do-dialogue entities :ego "I'd like a nice glass of milk." :ego "But sheep's milk is too creamy for me."))) :flask-1-with-mushrooms (actions/get-script entities diff --git a/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/outside_jail.clj b/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/outside_jail.clj index de08433f..7b6f3a22 100644 --- a/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/outside_jail.clj +++ b/desktop/src-common/advent/screens/rooms/outside_jail.clj @@ -143,7 +143,7 @@ (actions/do-dialogue entities :ego "That's Captain McHulk's house!" :ego "He's the mightiest knight in all of Remington." - :ego "If only I could be as strong as him one day." + :ego "If only I could be as strong as he is one day." ))} :stump {:box [205 68 251 100] :script (actions/get-script entities